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[bjornwilde]

Anyone feel up to beta reading an OOM for Ahsoka? Mostly I am looking for typos and proper tenses throughout (I kept getting distracted at work as I wrote it), but I'd love any thoughts on if the tone feels like The Clone Wars. Or if there are any bits that could use some expanding. Or if Yoda actually sounds like Yoda.

Thanks in advance.

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[ceitfianna]

That's wonderful and the only typo I see is a her for a here. I love seeing Ahsoka through this journey and it reflected one of my favorite Clone Wars' episodes, the ones where the young Jedi found their crystals. Also its so Ahsoka to try and help but mess up along the way.

[bjornwilde]

I loved the younglings episodes and am convinced they are still alive somehow. = ]

And thanks for your input and for reading. I'll look for the typo now.

With how hard Anakin's censure hit her in The Clone Wars movie, as well as when she nearly flinches when he says "you're rough around the edges. You wouldn't work with many jedi", I figured she'd have to be pretty close to thinking she was going to flunk out of being a jedi. That Anakin was her last chance at being a padawan. Which worked perfectly as the theme for her crystal test.